Notes for script

Planning - Working Notes:

1) Ahmed could play the naive boy and Dammy could play the killer. Dammy is capable of pulling off being very intimidating and cold and detached, and Ahmed can pull off being naive and stupid and oblivious to what is going on.

2) If Ahmed were to play the boy, we would have to slightly tone down the opening dialogue and replace it with something a little less “street.”

3) When he sees the blood on the killer’s coat, there should be a ZOOM IN, so that it not only takes on a raw, bloody meaning but also almost engulfs the screen in red, almost as if it is a flashing light or an alarm bell of this boy’s guilt/crime.

4) When he hands back the wallet, there should be a shot of the hands, which connotes a passing away, and also that his life is now in the killer’s hands.

5) There are so many different ways in which we can show/signify the killer killing the boy. We do not see blood, but we see the actual hit, possibly from the young boy’s point of view, putting us right in his shoes. Also, both the slamming of the hand on the shoulder and the killing should both be presented with a similar sound, such as a crashing sound or a distorted scream; something violent sounding, basically.

6) There should also be a shot of the clouds up above when he says “I hope it doesn’t rain...” Grey clouds connote a sense of foreboding, and the feeling that there is not something quiet right going on here.

7) Places/things would could connote death include a bordered up pub (which is near my house, but I do not know if we need permission), a boarded up house, and lilies. The lilies could be one or a dozen, a wrecked bouquet that the boy sees on the ground with the petals blowing in the wind, for instance.